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Lozorus a lost soul

Post  lozorus on Thu Jun 03, 2010 1:39 pm

Name: Lozorus Tagamatchi

Age: 13

Bloodline: 2 tome sharingan

Gender: Male

Bio: Lozorus was the only succesful experiment to successfully activate mangeyko sharingan by killing his parents. He was brought up and trained to fight at a young age before his village was exterminated, apart from him. He was brought up in the hidden leaf unaware of his potential power. He pushed himself always to become a better student. Pushing himself to become better than the others. He never felt he fit in though. One day he found out why. He had a secret. Something no one else had. A rare bloodline. A legendary one. He was also the inheritor of one blade. It was supposed to be a set but he would set out to find the others.

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Personality: Can be arrogant but is also unselfish

Ability:

Chakra strings

Item: Tarnished Mystic dragon blade

Other: He is a very logical thinker


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Post  British-Tiger on Thu Jun 03, 2010 1:42 pm

Either take Sharingan or Byakugan, one or the other, or just make them both permanently weak-average powered.

Also, a mystic dragon blade set is too much for a starting item, plus how many is there in a "set"?
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Post  Shikei on Thu Jun 03, 2010 1:44 pm

Lol i agree there, both bloodlines together is OP, and plus, the Bio isnt really good enough. The blade set, no. Start with something simple like a food pill. You are an academy student lol...
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Post  Shikei on Thu Jun 03, 2010 1:56 pm

So atm, denied until you change your app. Plus if your making a custom clan, make it in the clan app section
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Post  lozorus on Thu Jun 03, 2010 2:45 pm

The set is just a pair of curves blades and they are both average powerd :/

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Post  British-Tiger on Thu Jun 03, 2010 2:49 pm

Still, you can gain them some other time when you are not just a student.

Please change what we said to change.
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Post  Shikei on Fri Jun 04, 2010 8:16 am

Lol, you still are not going to be approved unfortunately, im being fair. Please change the bloodline, and make the application more informative.
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Post  British-Tiger on Fri Jun 04, 2010 4:34 pm

That type of Sharingan might be a bit much, and I have a feeling Shikei might say something, but...

I am going to say approved for now. Shikei might have a problem with that stage of Sharingan right away, but hey, at least your approved now XD
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Post  Shikei on Sat Jun 05, 2010 6:47 am

Oh cr*p i meant to say unnaproved unfortunately >_<
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Post  Shikei on Sun Jun 06, 2010 7:11 am

well thats abit better, 2 tome it the max for academy so approved
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